今夜會無詩可用
【美】艾德里安娜·裏奇 陳子弘 譯
看見你光腳走着
久久注視
新月的眼瞼
朦朧睡意
而後蔓延，裸露在你的黑髮上
睡着了，依然記得
在別處沒睡着和
睡不着
今晚我
覺得會
無詩可用
演繹句法：
動詞駕駛飛機
副詞修飾動作
動詞用強餵食名詞
淹沒主語
名詞咽不下去
動詞丟臉了 繼續喂
現在刻畫句子
2007年
TONIGHT NO POETRY WILL SERVE
Adrienne Rich
Saw you walking barefoot
taking a long look
at the new moon’s eyelid
later spread
sleep-fallen, naked in your dark hair
asleep but not oblivious
of the unslept unsleeping
elsewhere
Tonight I think
no poetry
will serve
Syntax of rendition:
verb pilots the plane
adverb modifies action
verb force-feeds noun
submerges the subject
noun is choking
verb disgraced goes on doing
now diagram the sentence
2007