今夜会无诗可用
【美】艾德里安娜·里奇 陈子弘 译
看见你光脚走着
久久注视
新月的眼睑
朦胧睡意
而后蔓延，裸露在你的黑发上
睡着了，依然记得
在别处没睡着和
睡不着
今晚我
觉得会
无诗可用
演绎句法：
动词驾驶飞机
副词修饰动作
动词用强喂食名词
淹没主语
名词咽不下去
动词丢脸了 继续喂
现在刻画句子
2007年
TONIGHT NO POETRY WILL SERVE
Adrienne Rich
Saw you walking barefoot
taking a long look
at the new moon’s eyelid
later spread
sleep-fallen, naked in your dark hair
asleep but not oblivious
of the unslept unsleeping
elsewhere
Tonight I think
no poetry
will serve
Syntax of rendition:
verb pilots the plane
adverb modifies action
verb force-feeds noun
submerges the subject
noun is choking
verb disgraced goes on doing
now diagram the sentence
2007